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Re: A Ballad From The Broken Hearted
First, let me say that you have my sympathy. When I read this, it was like you were looking into my eyes, straight into my mind, and reading what you ...
Sep 4, 2009 -
Re: I Stand Up
Whoa...that was actually really good. Short as the public's honeymoon with Obama, but good as a shoulder to cry on. (I know what I just said made no sense at ...
Sep 4, 2009 -
Re: First poem. Quite short. Not a haiku.
Uh....*clears throat* Yeah, I mean, what was that all about? I'm afraid I didn't get it at all. Still, I'm not going to say that's a bad thing. It's called ...
Sep 4, 2009 -
Re: Random Randomness!!!!!!!
One moment in time... (This line is just for a rhyme) You were right there with me: Now I cannot see. You were so ugly You looked like a pugly. ...
Jun 6, 2009 -
Re: Gone
Yo sista!! Warrior Princess to the rescue on her coal-black steed lol. Well other ppl can critique if they wish; I on the other hand will give an incredibly shallow ...
Jun 3, 2009 -
Re: Alone in the Twilight
Like an eventide fairy, Twilight steals across the meadows, Lightning the stars one by one With her velvet-violet hands. Like amber candles lit for the dead, The stardust glitters in ...
May 30, 2009 -
Re: Your Voice
Voices, voices all around me, Empty words and gilded lies; Darkness and despair surround me; I wait for a sun that may never rise. Voices of a thousand tongues Whisper ...
May 23, 2009 -
Re: New Moon Parody
Haha, this was GREAT!!!!!!!!! Nothing but praise for this play. I love the way you poke fun at some of the rather absurd aspects of New Moon, and you maintain ...
Apr 21, 2009 -
Re: A Superman, Edward Cullen & the Hulk spoof thing.
This was HILARIOUS!!!!!!! I loved it!!!!! It actually sounds like something I wrote once, just with different characters (long story). It was very random; that and the fast pace, banter, ...
Apr 21, 2009 -
Re: Incident at the Dance
You Move slowly Through the dancers Sit down And watch I Watch you New song Stand up Move slowly Toward you Trembling Smile brightly "Want to dance?" You Smile nervously ...
Apr 21, 2009 -
Re: Alone With Your Guitar
I watch As you walk away; Away from the crowd, From the groups of friends Absorbed in each other, Not sparing you A glance. I know you're lonely; I know ...
Apr 21, 2009 -
Re: His Poem
This poem is very good, it has a sort of wistful but resigned mood. Trust me, I have crushed seriously on so many guys it's hard to count them all. ...
Apr 21, 2009 -
Re: To be a Christian is...
Yay!!!! A fellow Christian!!! That was a good poem, though fairly simplified. You could have put in a little more about what it means to be a Christian, but these ...
Apr 21, 2009 -
Re: Words
I'll probably only be saying things that every one else has already said, but oh well. The poem is definitely original, with thought-provoking subject matter. I like how the rhyme ...
Apr 21, 2009 -
Re: Misunderstood me
I will tell you a story. One day a girl named Warrior Princess came up to a girl named cheri1706. "Well, I've got some good news and some bad news," ...
Apr 21, 2009
